Tuesday, September 29, 2009

Teaser Tuesday Two


Here's an excerpt of chapter one. This is from a different point of view, not Dervla's. But it happens at the same time as Dervla's story happens. They connect later, I promise.


Magically Gone!

6 comments:

Becca said...

Aw, I pitied her. Now I wonder where she's going. :(

Amber said...

Yay! I got someone to pity her. That was the biggest problem with this chapter. Before the second re-write, I had a problem trying to draw reader sympathy towards my MC.

Kristin Miller said...

Nice. I especially like the visual of the car on the road and the mouse. Those moments really set the scene and made me wonder about the MC's predicament and the world around her.

Deniz Kuypers said...

I'm with Kristin: I'm curious now as to what's going on, where we are. Nicely done. Looking forward to reading more.

Kaitlin Ward said...

This definitely made me curious! Nice work:)

Paranormalchick said...

Awe! :( Where's she going?