Copy editor, editor, author, loving all of it.
Aw, I pitied her. Now I wonder where she's going. :(
Yay! I got someone to pity her. That was the biggest problem with this chapter. Before the second re-write, I had a problem trying to draw reader sympathy towards my MC.
Nice. I especially like the visual of the car on the road and the mouse. Those moments really set the scene and made me wonder about the MC's predicament and the world around her.
I'm with Kristin: I'm curious now as to what's going on, where we are. Nicely done. Looking forward to reading more.
This definitely made me curious! Nice work:)
Awe! :( Where's she going?
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