Copy editor, editor, author, loving all of it.
This made me laugh! Loved her thoughts between pieces of the guy's sentence, and how it turned out to be nothing like what she thought.
This piqued my interest about the world of your story. Master? Pastor? Handprint? I'm curious....
Love her internal dialog!! Made me LOL! I am also curious about your story.
That was a close call for her! As everyone else had said, your setting or "world" is very intriguing.
Yeah, I liked the fractured sentence, too, lol! I love misunderstandings like that, and you did a nice job with it.
Lol, I love her fevered thoughts here. Nice scene!
I'm with Alyson -- lots of intriguing details that make me want to know more about what exactly is going on here.
Loved the byplay of her internal thoughts! She's completely freaking out and it's not what she expected!
Dang it!!! I missed it :(
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